Hello Loyal Followers!
Today I will make my third attempt at my elevator pitch. I got some really good feedback last time so I've tweaked my pitch to include what I thought would be really useful. Here is the most important and influential feedback I got:
- "Maybe you could go into the cost for someone to hire this company, maybe even a promotion for college students." - Taylor Brenenstuhl
- "I'd like to hear a mention of them [competitors] and why your product stands out from theirs." - Carolina Lafuente
- "This could easily come across as an internet scam if not marketed correctly." - Alexander Gubernikoff
The last comment from Alex was the most suprising. I really hadn't thought that my service could come off as spammy. Now that I think of it, though, if I don't design my website correctly and provide that legitimate human component survivors could think that I'm trying to take advantage of them. Which is certainly not the case.
None of the feedback I got was silly or mean, thankfully. I think the first time I did my pitch I didn't do as good of a job as explaining how crazy it is that there isn't more resources for survivors out in the world and more people responded with shaming comments about the survivors. Hopefully, I have been able to alleviate some of that shame.
Anywho, here's attempt number three! Let me know what I can do better :)
Hey Cassie,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you included past comments in your post to understand what feedback you received and to understand the changes you made because of that feedback. In your pitch you do a great job supporting your opportunity by supporting it with facts and giving great detail of what you actually want to do. Your idea is really good and in the pitch you do a great job in hitting every aspect of your idea. Check out mine here: http://andrewdales.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Hello Cassandra,
ReplyDeleteI also appreciate that you included past comments in your post. Instead of an overview, you made it very specific. The last comment did surprise me a lot because it is such a very touchy subject and something that would help so many people, I would have never thought of it as a scam. I think you did a wonderful job and that your idea is very interesting. Great job! Here is the link to my post: http://isabellaangulo.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Hey Cassandra! I think your idea is very unique and I can tell right away how much you care about the idea. You put a lot of thought into each aspect, which is evident from the length of the video. You did a great job explaining the details and I appreciated that you researched where your services are currently being done like in Europe. I hope your idea is successful in the future! If you want to check out my pitch you can at this link:
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Hey Cassandra! I really like the layout of your blog! It is efficient and organized. I really think your idea is original. It shows that you have done a lot of research on the background information of your service. I really like how you said the price and a way for people who can't pay that much to get the same service. Although all the information you presented in your elevator pitch is very important, it may be too long for this assignment. However, I think that you did a really great job selling your service. I can't wait to hear more about it! Check out my product, the pod! I hope you like my elevator pitch! http://itsmyblogforentc3003.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no3.html
ReplyDeleteI like your idea a lot and I think you have one of the most thorough explanations of your product that I’ve come across. I think that targeting a specific part of the market can help you focus your efforts as well. I also like that spoke about your competition and laws that are in place already and spoke specifically on what you would do to accomplish your goals. Good job.
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